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Sitting in Melancholy

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Sitting in melancholy
edges are white
buildings grow blurry
and fade out of sight
left is an image
bleeding with blue --
a stained rose of flaking gold
and a melody left askew.

There isn't anyone who
knows I am here
Whatever I touch
I can only besmear
I'm a dim-lit lantern
lost in dark sea
I am powerful silence
and silence is me.

A plethora of gravel
once weighed down my soul
they now reside in
a cavernous hole.
I'm crouched here, hollow
everything's bleared
and from my hopeless eyes bloomed
a scarlet-red tear.
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The last two parts were added on March 4th.
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DButterfly1969's avatar
i like this poem, you did very well writing it. i just think that if you start a poem with rhymes you should continue in the same style all the way through. if you are not sure if something rhymes just read it aloud few times. it's sometimes hard to write fixed form poems, but you can always find synonyms to what you want to say or just re-fraze it. good look in the future :)